Score: 5

"I'll be honest..."

submission: life of a french model

date: January 20, 2007

The animation and artwork are very lackluster, however, assuming it's your first cartoon, it's surprisingly better than most peoples' first attempts at Flash. My suggestions would be to avoid choosing ambitious projects for your first submission, because you'll only end up getting frustrated and wasting a possible well written story on a piece of work with terrible graphics and animation.

With your level of skill, I'd recommend doing several small projects first, before trying to make something like this. I can tell you have intentions of creating something decent for Newgrounds, but as of now, your abilities with drawings and animation need to be practiced. Keep trying--I actually gave up with Flash several times before I finally settled down and made good material.

Score: 0

"It's a bit ironic..."

submission: Vote 5 for MARIO!

date: September 20, 2006

It's funny that you make a big fuss about sprite artists not being real animators, and that you feel sorry for people who actually take the time to draw real Flash, when you seem to have an awful lot of those free protection point cartoons under your belt. You know what I'm talking about; Those things we get hundreds of each day... Those cartoons that under normal circumstances would get blammed, however with all of those endless amount of crews (i.e. Clocks, Locks, Glocks, Star Syndicate, etc.) they pass judgement. The kind of cartoons which feature long title screens to make them look professional, until eventually blinking screens and imported jpegs kick in...

Right. You feel sorry for REAL animators.

Besides, not all sprite cartoons include stolen artwork. What about mine, for instance, where most of the sprites are custom made or re-drawn? Actually, 90% of the Mario sprite cartoons which feature non-custom sprites usually get blammed or receive low scores anyway. The only instances where people automatically vote 5 for a Mario cartoon is when it's a video game mishap (or something similar).

Calm down, and don't make such a deal when you yourself can't contribute to any decent and original animations.

Score: 7

"You wanted some feedback, so here it is..."

submission: Rock Stars Episode One

date: July 25, 2006

Although it's pretty good for a first episode, there were a few things you could improve on: Most notably, the backgrounds appeared to be imported images (I'm guessing you drew them in Adobe Illustrator). Typically, the overall filesize probably would have been dramatically smaller if most of the graphics were made in Flash itself.

The lip-sync was great. That's usually something most people have difficult with, but you made it turn out well. A lot of people skimp out by simply tweeing an open mouth over-and-over again (like in cheap animes). The pacing was alright, but there were a few instances which could have probably picked up faster.

Usually, I import my voice overs first, and animate each line of dialogue to go according to the voices, that way everything moves quickly. It seemed like you animated the cartoon first, then added the speech later. Oh well. It's not that big of a deal.

The humor was keen and originally, and seemingly void of cheap fanboy references like the kind seen in Family Guy. I especially liked the little anti-anime thing you said at one point.

Anyway, not bad for a first start. Keep on working, and you'll come up with some great flashes.